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James



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PostSubject: Tracers: Mr. Black meets the Hivekids   Mon Feb 21, 2011 12:30 am

Here's a really rough draft of the scene where The Assassin (I've taken to calling him Mr. Black. Any thoughts?)
Some of this dialogue sucks and some I kind of like but still needs to be tweaked. Any feedback would be apprectiated.

Also, what about changing "Ryan" to "Rain"? It sounds similar, but Rain is more unusual.
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